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Tec ([personal profile] thrillingdetectivetales) wrote in [community profile] heavyartillery2020-01-29 07:51 am
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WIP Wednesday [2020-01-29]

WIP WEDNESDAY!



You all know the drill by now: trot out a piece of a work in progress you’re particularly proud of or crowdsource your troubles among the rest of the talented so-and-so’s in HBOWar fandom! Chat about creation in general or get into the nitty gritty of word choice in this one sentence that just isn’t quite clicking.

Go forth, you beautiful babies, and let’s build each other up!
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muccamukk: Eddie and Andy standing in a bombed out airstrip sharing a look. (TP: Ruins)

Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] muccamukk 2020-01-29 03:27 pm (UTC)(link)
Having ALL the feels about these two, and really want to do the reunion fic prompted in the LLSS newsletter. I'm thinking Burgin's PoV.

However, I'm trying to get at least a draft of my fic for rairpair done before I write anything else.

However, however, I'm still poking away at the There Was Only One Bed fic, which got sort of off the rails with the sex scene, so I need to go back and rewrite a bunch, but here's a bit from earlier in:
When he came back into their cramped room, Hillbilly was sitting on the edge of the bed with his elbows on his knees. He wasn't slumped, but sitting at rest. When Andy closed and bolted the door, Hillbilly looked up, teeth flashing white in the dark. "Figure I oughta sleep on the floor after all, sir," he said.

Andy took a breath, tasting the air, which was cool and smelling faintly of eucalyptus pollen. The room was very dark, dark in a way that Andy hadn't known before wartime blackouts. The bit of moonlight coming in through the curtains showed only the outline of Eddie's body. Andy hesitated over the light switch, wondering if it would be easier to have this out in the dark or when he could read Hillbilly's expression. In the end, he left the light off, and went to sit at the head of the bed, leaving enough space between their bodies to seem decorous. "Worried about your virtue?" he asked carefully.

Hillbilly's head dropped forward as his hissed out a breath through his teeth. It wasn't quite a laugh. "Worried about yours, more like, sir. Can't account for something I don't know I'm doing."

It wasn't a confession, but it skirted close to being one. Andy imagined Hillbilly weighing the options: how much he trusted Andy, how much he was potentially risking, what there might be to gain. Or was that wishful thinking on Andy's part? Was Hillbilly worried that Andy might read the tension between them in a way Hillbilly did not intend, and make an unwelcome and potentially ruinous advance?

"I'm long past the age where I've any virtue left to trouble me," Andy said finally. "Though I am troubled by the possibility of stepping on you on the way to the head. It's up to you." Again, he felt like he was balancing on that ridge, close to getting somewhere, but with a precipice on either side, and Hillbilly stuck up there with him.
slightlytookish: The first example we see of Eddie in his natural habitat: following Andy around and looking at him with hearteyes (TP: Haldane & Jones - Hearteyes No.1)

Re: Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] slightlytookish 2020-01-29 07:29 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh wow, I think you shared some of this fic before, right? (My memory is terrible so maybe not). Either way, I adore this trope and I adore what you shared here. I love getting together fics and they're so very awkwardly on the way to getting together at this point, but they just don't know it yet ♥

I'm fully cheering you on from over here. I can't wait to read more of this!
muccamukk: Jeff sitting with his collar unbuttoned, relaxed and happy. (B5: Fond Look)

Re: Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] muccamukk 2020-01-29 08:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I posted a couple bits on previous WIP Wednesdays. I'll hopefully finish it some point this month, it needs, idk, 3-4k more? But I need to redo most of the smut, as it doesn't work with the tone, so *sighs*
slightlytookish: Andy and Eddie in profile against a green background (TP: Haldane & Jones - Green)

Re: Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] slightlytookish 2020-01-29 08:58 pm (UTC)(link)
If you ever want/need to bounce ideas off someone I'm happy to be that person. Otherwise: still over here, cheering! *\o/*
thrillingdetectivetales: Davie and Alan from the play, Kidnapped, kissing on the moors. Both men's faces are obscured. Davie has a hand on Alan's cheek. (Default)

Re: Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] thrillingdetectivetales 2020-01-30 03:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I am so excited for this fic. This is such a beautiful, bittersweet moment and I really love the palpable tension you've managed to infuse throughout the scene. It's almost another fully-fleshed character in the room there with them in a way that hurts but also makes me want to cheer them through at the same time.

Also, LOVE this line, lol:

"I'm long past the age where I've any virtue left to trouble me," Andy said finally.
muccamukk: Sara in a beret and a lot of diamonds glancing back over her shoulder. (LoT: Undercover)

Re: Andy/Eddie

[personal profile] muccamukk 2020-01-30 09:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I'm generally pretty happy with it, though need to kick it in edits and write the ending. Hopefully I actually finish it at some point soon.
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