WIP Thursday [2020-04-02]

[thrillingdetectivetales]

Since I totally forgot about WIP Wednesday—because what even is linear time at this point, am I right?—it's time for
WIP Thursday!



Bring us your snippets, bring us your dialogue, bring us your awkwardly worded and your perfect imagery!

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Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[muccamukk]

Working on a fic where Andy survives the war, but his head injury combines with general trauma to make him forget the war years.

"Have you heard from any of them?" Everett asked, pushing past Andy's silent awkwardness.

"From who?"

"Your company."

Andy flushed, realising that he'd utterly misunderstood Everett's earlier comment, not known a military term that should have been as familiar as breathing. "No," he said, then hesitated. That wasn't true. Andy sighed and pulled the blanket around himself even though he was already too warm. "I had a stack of letters waiting for me when I got home, all with Marine Corps postmarks, but..." Andy stopped. He didn't know how to say it felt like reading a stranger's mail. He hadn't recognised a single name, and they'd all known a different man.

"I'm sure you'll feel up to it soon," Everett said, but his smile was disappointed. He knew as well as Andy did that Andy had let his boys down.

I'm not really sure how to deal with the letters though. I don't want to include entire letters, but a lot of Andy's understanding of the situation is going to depend on them, so, there should be some of the letters?

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[thrillingdetectivetales]

Oooohhh my heart! This one is going to hurt so good, I can already feel it.

I like the idea of peppering pieces of different letters through for additional context. I think it'll add a really fun layer of depth to the narrative.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[muccamukk]

Yeah, I had been thinking of including bits of letters as scene breaks, both Eddie's letters to Andy, and Andy's letters home including mentions of Eddie, since he starts to get context from that.

But that'd mean rethinking the structure of the story.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[thrillingdetectivetales]

Depends how much retroactive work you want to do, I s'pose, but I think that sounds really nice.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[muccamukk]

I was hoping to get this done quickly, is the problem, but it's turning into one of those Fast or Well situations that had the Melbourne fic in process for months.

I'll have to think about what to include.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[thrillingdetectivetales]

Ah, yeah, the whole "rock and hard place" of the fandom world, lol. Godspeed however you decide to go. I'm sure it'll be excellent either way!

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[slightlytookish]

Aww, Andy. <3

I love the idea of including bits of the letters, if it doesn't cause a ton of extra work for you. The scene break idea you mentioned above sounds like it could be a really fun way of incorporating them.

Also love that you're including Pope in this fic.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[muccamukk]

I think if I can make it an excerpt rather than a whole letter, it'll keep the situation under control.

Pope was conveniently going to Yale right then, so he's useful.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[scandalinbohemia]

All the delicious angst <3333 Amnesia is a great trope! And that's a great snippet.

Also (chants): letters! Letters! If you want to do it the quick and dirty way, you can just use self-explanatory bits from the letters to break the scenes.

Re: Andy/Eddie Amnesia

[muccamukk]

I'm still figuring out how to tool the letters in terms of length, timing, and format, but we'll see.